Tuesday, 11 February 2014

Wrapped in cloud

She is wrapped in cloud.

Her eyes dark,
she cannot see the sun,
can't see her way out of the canyon.

A pebble on the path may as well be a mountain,
she can't find her way round it.

She is wrapped in cloud.
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14 comments:

  1. Stacy M.S.11 February 2014 at 23:31

    'she is wrapped in cloud' ....such a lovely vision!

    i enjoyed your poem and am happy to find your blog!!


    stacy lynn mar
    http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

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  2. Vandana Sharma1 December 2014 at 00:09

    Sometimes in life too our vision is clouded

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  3. brudberg1 December 2014 at 01:14

    I think being wrapped in cloud can be too dark for me.. But I guess when reaching for the sky the clouds migh be there.

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  4. Sumana Roy1 December 2014 at 01:41

    i wouldn't want to be in that space for sure but the images are strikingly beautiful..

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  5. Gabriella1 December 2014 at 03:05

    I like how we can also read your poem metaphorically.

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  6. Brian Miller1 December 2014 at 04:16

    i think i have known her...
    tough times when even the pebbles seem as mountains
    and our vision is so obscured....

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  7. Sherry Blue Sky1 December 2014 at 05:33

    I love your beginning and ending with "she is wrapped in cloud" - and the pebble which blocks her path.

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  8. NataĊĦek1 December 2014 at 07:16

    with one line you describe a state of mind perfectly.

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  9. Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger1 December 2014 at 07:51

    What a wonderful image--lovely, lovely write!

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  10. Gen Giggles 1 December 2014 at 08:43

    Great imagery. It really does affect us that way.

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  11. Anonymous1 December 2014 at 12:34

    Great repetition....and the idea of being unable to find her way around a pebble on a path (for it may as well be a mountain) reminds me so much of some of the thoughts in Robert Pirsig's book, "Zen and the Art of Motorcycle Maintenance." It is one of my favorites and so I am grateful for the reminder. Thanks :-)

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  12. Preeti S.2 December 2014 at 02:40

    Multiple layers of meaning contained within such simple and beautiful lines. The repetition of the line - "she is wrapped in could" - adds a great effect to the entire poem.

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  13. Old Egg2 December 2014 at 10:53

    I think many of us would have thought of a person we knew like this.

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  14. Locomente5 December 2014 at 23:08

    Amazing title...
    Brilliant !!!

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